Noticed some stuff in the D@W: Campaigns layout draft. Here’s Chapter 1: Armies…
Pg. # Throughout the document, table titles are inconsistent in their capitalization. For example, some tables capitalize the prepositions, some do not.
Pg. 9 The text refers to the “Cost Per Week Per Mercenary Type” table as being below, but the formatting has pushed it above the note.
Pg. 11 The text refers to the “Mercenary GP Wage per Month” table as being below, but the formatting has pushed it to the page before the note (i.e. above).
Pg. 12 The text refers to the “Unit Loyalty” table, but doesn’t point out where it is. Admittedly, it is right below the text reference.
Pg. 12 The text refers to the “Exotic Mercenary Cost Per Time Period Multiplier” table as being adjacent, but the formatting has pushed it above the note.
Pg. 13 The example at the top of the right-hand column uses the form “Marcus’s” for the possessive; not sure if this or “Marcus’” is the currently accepted style.
Pg. 14 The text refers to the “Training and Equipment Time and Cost” table, but doesn’t point out where it is (below).
Pg. 14 Not a typo, but the first time I’ve noticed this:
“If conscripts are released from service by their leader, trained conscripts will become mercenaries or brigands…” all of them? Every time? Why do none of them return home to a life less dangerous?
Pg. 14 “In addition to conscripting peasants, the leader of a domain can
also levy a peasant militia…” is it just me, or does the wording of this sentence seems to imply that one cannot levy a peasant militia with also implementing conscription? I presume that is not the case, but I’m unsure whether this is ambiguously written, or a case of poor reading comprehension on my part.
Pg. 15 The last paragraph on the right-hand column should be referring to militia who are released from service, but instead refers to conscripts.
Pg. 16 The text refers to the “Follower Type and Equipment by Class” table, but does not point out where it is (above and below). The second portion of the table also has (cont.) after the title; is this standard style? What about (cont. from previous page) for clarity?
Pg. 17 The text refers to the Upkeep costs for slave soldiers as 3gp per month, and 16gp per month for ogres. Why don’t mounted slaves (e.g. cavalry, beast riders, etc.) cost more due to maintenance for their mounts? Slave goblin wolf riders suddenly seem very attractive…
Pg. 18 The last sentence of Example #1 is cumbersome, stating:
“…the slave soldiers can be trained as, e.g., light infantry or heavy cavalry, according to…”
How about:
“the slave soldiers can be trained (e.g. as light infantry or heavy cavalry) according to…”
Pg. 19 The text refers to the “Vassal Troops by Realm Size” table as being below, but the formatting has pushed it above the note.
Pg. 19 The text (last paragraph on the page) refers to the “Exotic Creatures Roster” as being on page “XX” instead of the actual page reference.
Pg. 20 The text uses no article for “Leadership proficiency,” but this is inconsistent in the document; in some places the definite article “the” is used for proficiencies.
Pg. 20 The Example has inconsistencies in the number of units or divisions. 4 divisions are created from 10 units; 2 units (heavy cavalry) in the 1st division, and the other three divisions have 3 units each (heavy infantry, light infantry and bowmen), totalling 11 units.
Pg. 20 Under the explanation for Leadership Ability, “e.g.” is used instead of i.e., when what is being presented (“4 plus Charisma bonus or penalty”) is the sole (alternate) meaning, not one example among many
Pg. 23 Under Creature Handler, “Some creature handlers are animal trainers themselves, while otherwise rely on Beast Friendship…” should read, “Some creature handlers are animal trainers themselves, while others rely on Beast Friendship…” instead
Pg. 24 Under Quartermaster, “A quartermaster is an experienced soldier who manages distribution of supplies and provision to the troops…” should read, “A quartermaster is an experienced soldier who manages distribution of supplies and provisions to the troops…”
Pg. 24 Under Siege Engineer there is no mention of replacing Artillerists and at what ratio (1:1?), even though their abilities would seem to allow them to do so…
Pg. 27 The Beastman Troop table’s line entry for “Goblin Troops” is improperly highlighted
Pg. 30 Under Size Category, “Gigantic creatures count as 24 men, s only 5 gigantic creatures…” should read, “Gigantic creatures count as 24 men, so only 5 gigantic creatures…”
Pg. 31 Under War Mounts the abbreviation “ML” is used for morale score, in spite of several previous uses of “morale score” and no prior explanation (e.g. “morale score (ML)”)
Pg. 31 Under Workers, “Workers are cannot be formed into units…” should read, “Workers cannot be formed into units…”
Pg. 31 Under Normal Movement, “Most creatures can carry a maximum of twice their normal load at full movement…” and, “When carrying more than their normal load, their movement rate is reduced to half…” are incompatible.
Pg. 32 Under Monthly Wage, “Owned, or enslaved sentient, creatures can sometimes…” should read, “Owned, or enslaved, sentient creatures can sometimes…”
Pg. 32 Under Supply Cost, “p.XX” should list the page number.
Pg. 32 Under Handler Cost, “p.XX” should list the page number.
Pg. 32 Under Total Cost, “Note that the creature were owned or enslaved…” should read, “Note that if the creature were owned or enslaved…” and, “…feel free to round them to ease of play!” should read, “…feel free to round them off for ease of play!”