Proofreading the Campaigns final layout (20130823V04.pdf, from the backer downloads. Hopefully this is current… ?)
Page 7 - “Campaigns, provides rules for going to war, maneuvering and supply armies…” should be supplying?
Page 9 - “The Mercenary Availability by Realm Size table shows how many of each type of mercenary is available in each size of realm” “is” should be “are”?
Page 12 - “f the character is personally vulnerable, the mercenaries may attack himor stage a coup.” Needs a space between him and or.
Is Grudging Loyalty supposed to be different from the way it works in ACKS core?
Page 12 - “Mercenary units with experience of real war are known as veterans.” bugs me; I’d’ve used “in” instead of “of”.
Do beastmen suffer the morale penalties for lacking an armorer or quartermaster? One assumes these are specialists they might be lacking. Also, what sort of proficiencies might qualify a PC to serve as a unit’s quartermaster (considering the case of low/mid-level PCs attached to or running a small mercenary unit)?
Page 24 - “The number of specialists available to hire will be determined” feels awkward to me; would use “for” instead of “to” here.
Page 24 - “The fees required to find each type of specialist are determine by the market class” should be determined.
Page 25 - “All mercenaries
and followers presented in the Adventurer Conqueror King System core rules and Player’s Companion and Domains at War: Campaigns supplement are described.” Could cut out one “and” and use commas instead. Supplement should also be plural I think.
Either some of the HD entries on the troop table are missing, or my pdf reader doesn’t render them properly. I’m inclined to believe it’s the latter.
Why do none of the human cavalry units have mount damage? Also why do human cataphract horses (lamellar-barded medium warhorses) have 3 more HP than elven cataphract lameller-barded medium warhorses?
Are rust monsters really supposed to have 0 supply cost?
I’m sort of surprised that workbeast ankhegs are an option, since I was under the impression that ankhegs were natural hunters / carnivores.
Page 42, “calamity” should be bolded in the flag description like it is in the emblem description on page 40 (for consistency).
Page 43, Surgical Saw - “Sharp, sturdy saws are used to saw through bone and tissue when amputation of the limbs is required.” “the” seems odd in this context.
Page 44 - “Artillery can fire ammunition of a lighter or heavier weight than indicated for their type, but reduce maximum range by 25%.” Second clause there needs a subject; it could plausibly be the imperative “you”, but that’s at odds with the style of the rest of this section.
Page 44 - “If the artillery’s modified attack throw, ignoring the creature’s Armor Class, would have been sufficient to hit the creature, the artillery’s projectile has landed near enough that the creature is within the area of effect and effected as above.” Pretty sure “effected” should be “affected”; effected is to cause change, affected is to be the subject of it.
“It deals fire damage to the hp of creatures each round the creatures are in the area of effect or until the fire is extinguished.” What is that “or” doing there?
“Artillery crews without an artillerist (p. 23) suffer -4 to attack throws. Artillery firing crude ammunition suffer a -2 to attack throws.” Either put an “a” before each -x, or before neither (probably should be before both).
Page 44, “Artillery crews without an artillerist specialist reduce their rate of fire by half.” Artillerist should be bolded here, as it is in the preceding paragraph (arguably if one is looking for the consequences of lacking an artillerist, being able to immediately recognize both paragraphs as of immediate interest is a good thing).
Page 47, “See Equipment Availability in Chapter 2 of ACKS (p.39) for rules on equipment availability; and Supplying Armies in Chapter 3 of this rulebook (p. 56) for rules on supply lines.” should use a comma instead of a semicolon.
Page 48, “As a rule of thumb, a structure will have 1 shp per ton of weight.” Should be “has” instead of “will have”; I think this tense shift occurred because the previous sentence was about future-conditional collapse when out of HP, but the rest of this section is in the present tense.
Page 49 - “A stone wall is 100’ long and 10’ thick, with height ranging from 20’ to 60’ high.” The “high” at the end is a bit superfluous.
Page 50 - “When levying peasants to serve as laborers, it has the same limits and effects on the domains as levying peasants into a militia.” could be tightened up to “Levying peasants to serve as laborers has the same limits and effects on domains as levying peasants into a militia.” Even if this change isn’t made, “the domains” should be either “domains” (the general case) or “the domain” (a specific single domain). Not sure what situation “the domains” would make sense in.
Page 50 - the text mentions that one in four laborers is skilled, while no more than one in a hundred is a master craftsman. How common are apprentice and skilled craftsmen? Four in a hundred and two in a hundred?
Page 52, spellcasting in construction table - “Increase construction rate of workers at construction site by 200%” should be 100%, since it’s a doubling, not a tripling.
Page 54 - “Initiative: Each army’s leader calculates his initiative score by rolling 1d6 and adding his strategic ability (p. 20) to the roll. 1. Before rolling, the leader may order a forced march (p. 55)”. There’s an extra “1.” between the two sentences, as if the second was supposed to be a sub-bullet but was incompletely merged back into the main bullet.
Page 55, “The daily and weekly movement rates of an army are related directly to encounter movement rates of its troops…” should have a “the” before “encounter movement”.
Page 55, “However, each day of force marching counts as two days of marching for purposes of rest and recuperation”. Force marching, or forced marching?
Page 56, “Each week, the supply cost is 60gp for each unit of 120 infantry; and 240gp for each unit of 60 cavalry.” Semicolon vs comma issues again.
Page 56, “The costs are inclusive of fresh bread, wheat, and water,” would be tighter as “The costs include fresh bread, wheat, and water”
Page 59, “The maximum range at which an armies can be reconnoitered is determined by its size, as shown on the adjacent Reconnaissance Range table.” Armies should be army.
Page 60, “his location and the location of units in under his command may not be scryed upon.” Superfluous “in”
More to come…